Chapter 6.32-- Fight Ends

posted 3rd Jul 2018, 10:44 PM

Chapter 6.32-- Fight Ends
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3rd Jul 2018, 10:44 PM

HeSerpenty

Now all Kal has to do is drag himself home with this new weapon to present to his bosses. Hopefully (for Kal) it will be enough to make up for NOT capturing the girl he was sent to capture. That's if he doesn't die on the way.... X"D.
Thoughts? Predictions?

Wonder what Grandpa's thinking he's gonna get to do before he succumbs to that venom >___>. Maaaybe Kalverick should've killed him. Slap that on his list of mistakes lately X"D.

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Wow guys.. I don't know what to say. I'm sorry I took an extra week. On the bright side I had a wonderful time in the mountains. On the negative side.... I just wasn't feeling great the week after. But I'm back! And I'll see you next week! <3

Btw....I decided to hand draw the wood on the walls of the house this time as oppose to textures. I think it looks better? Maybe? But what do YOU think? <3

Thanks for reading, everybody!


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4th Jul 2018, 12:52 AM

Jarvi

Grandpa is going to carve out the serpent in the wooden floor / wall. Plus maybe some hints.

4th Jul 2018, 5:57 AM

megados

I think so too.

I do like the hand drawn wood texture :)

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4th Jul 2018, 11:59 AM

HeSerpenty

Thank you! I'm glad to hear that feedback!

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4th Jul 2018, 11:59 AM

HeSerpenty

Hahaha that is a very good guess! X)

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4th Jul 2018, 8:25 AM

Slim Kittens

I know Kalverick isn't blind, but is that a carving knife Grandpa has?

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4th Jul 2018, 12:00 PM

HeSerpenty

Hahaha Kal picked up the gun and forgot about his knife....which he left with Stefian (thats Grandpa). Probably another mistake on his list of mistakes! LOL

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4th Jul 2018, 2:19 PM

Centcomm

Kal... must.. die... Humphs - maybe they have anti venom that would be cool :D

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6th Jul 2018, 1:32 PM

HeSerpenty

Hahaha you've been rooting for that for a while!

Even if there IS such a thing, I don't think it will get to poor gramps in time :'D

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4th Jul 2018, 10:37 PM

Rulerbrain

Huh, when I read the first few pages I thought this was taking place in the medieval times

Didn't figure this was set when humans had guns already. That makes it way more interesting

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6th Jul 2018, 1:34 PM

HeSerpenty

Haha yeea it's definitely kinda inspired by medieval era but since the very beginning I knew I wanted to add more modernized things, like guns XD. And cigarettes....instead of pipes XD.. bottled beer, etc etc. The good stuff haha. Anything I can make them have without needing electricity XD

Thanks a lot for the feedback!

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5th Jul 2018, 12:46 AM

Proxy170

Kal, ya gotta get back ASAP or YOU'RE gonna die a slow and painful death! D: And you will have made a huge mistake in killing him that way...not because I doubt the certainty of his death, but the fact that he now has solid evidence of your existence and threat, right on his back!

So happy to see the update this week, Serpy! Hopefully you're feeling better now though for the long run?

And I'll be honest, when you use textures you do it in such a subtle way that I don't notice it/find it distracting. BUT I do think the more organic, fluid feel of hand drawn textures makes for a good look. It's also a bit more forgiving versus when you have a linear texture line up with something very NOT straight edged.

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6th Jul 2018, 1:38 PM

HeSerpenty

Haha once again I think you are the only person concerned for Kal! He's not thinking clearly.. he's lost too much blood haha. Letting your victim die slow like that when he's shouting vengeance is the "Things Villains Shouldn't Do 101".
Unfortunately...Kalverick's mistake here won't just make HIS life more dangerous but also the lives of all the "good guys" back at home x"D

I do feel better, thank you so much! The mountains always make me feel refreshed.

Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad it's not a totally abrupt change so that it's disracting but I agree that the hand drawn feels more fluid. And more freedom too!

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5th Jul 2018, 11:07 AM

DLKmusic

Hey Kal, Make sure you get that wound good and infected!!! Don't want you to die until you've had a few fever-induced nightmarish hallucinations!!

Remember this conversation? Metaphorical Spider

heh heh heh, guess what! you aren't the spider anymore (not that I'm trying to influence your hallucinations or anything, I'm above that sort of thing)....

Oh, and as a side note, be sure to leave a blood-soaked trail behind you that even a blind man can follow! The council will be SO PROUD!!!!

PS: Didn't notice the flooring and walls til after you mentioned it, but it looks awesome. I bow to the mistress of subtle!

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6th Jul 2018, 1:41 PM

HeSerpenty

LOL you always want the very best for Kal <33

Hey, you're right that metaphorical spider is TOTALLY good hallucination fuel! Haha he's not the spider anymore.....he's the poor helpless butterfly stuck in the web. Okay maybe not butterfly...maybe just FLY XD.


And thanks for that feedback, Don! Subtle is good! I always like to sneak in and make my style changes hopefully without it being too obvious!

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8th Jul 2018, 7:47 AM

DLKmusic

Biggest Difference I can see between Kal and the butterfly, is that Kal volunteered for this! He ran head-first into the "web". The butterfly, on the other hand, knew better, and wouldn't have been in that web if it hadn't been put there by some psycho... *ahem, Kal*

Ya know, I do realize that I'm just gloating here, and I really shouldn't, because gloating is wrong. But, If you're going to do something wrong, do it RIGHT!

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5th Jul 2018, 12:57 PM

Matt Knab

Well, if that wound wasn't infected before, that splat in the mud certainly didn't help...

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14th Jul 2018, 9:04 PM

HeSerpenty

Lololol let's cross our fingers, right?? X"D

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5th Jul 2018, 7:01 PM

Alicia

I have a feeling... Kal should have sat in on Daggot's lesson here. Mistakes have been made. The Serpent Nation is in trouble, me thinks. :o

This is all so exciting, Serpyyyyy!

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16th Jul 2018, 12:17 PM

HeSerpenty

Haha all this coulda been avoided if Kal paid attention in class! X"D

Hehe thank uuuu! <33

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14th Jul 2018, 8:15 PM

Haegan2005

Just... OH My!

You do not leave survivors if you are going to stay hidden. The old man does not need to survive for long. Just long enough to tell other people what happened.

And that wound looks nasty. That is a lot of blood he is leaving behind. If he can not do something to staunch it quickly he may not survive to get back to the hidden nation. And if he does get back, he is likely facing infection. Bullets punching through clothing take a lot of debris into the wound. It is a lovely source of infection. The mud would likely not have helped much either, though if he is actually still actively bleeding he would not face much of an issue with it. Not much would have entered the wound.

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16th Jul 2018, 12:18 PM

HeSerpenty

Haha what a rookie move! Lol Kal isn't thinking clearly-- probably that shot in the guts not helping combined with his cruel nature to want his victims to suffer X"D.

Yesss the batttle is only beginning for Kalverick.......aaand perhaps also all our friends back at the Nation XDD

26th Oct 2018, 4:30 AM

Lilbluebox

As much as I'd like Kal to just die in the mud - no wait, I don't want that, that arguably makes things even worse. Well, drat.

In any case, my story senses are tingling. I'm pretty sure Kal's going to get back, with the gun, his life will unfortunately be saved from blood loss and potential infection, and he'll continue to be a giant pain in the butt for quite some time yet. C'mon, the guy practically screams major antagonist, and he goes down in a fight against Gramps here? I don't think so.

Poor Grandpa. I've decided not to be angry with him for whatever it is he's planning to do; I can't say I blame him, after all. If I knew I was dying and I knew who was to blame and they'd done all this AFTER hurting a member of my family... yeah, the Council really dug themselves into a hole with this one. Especially given the Gramps here seems to have run into the serpents before!

....This whole 'keeping the whole race a secret' thing really isn't working out for you guys, is it? >.>

On a more layout note, I really like the transition here. You're really good at those in general, actually, which is good, considering how many scene changes you go through per chapter. I should count them someday, just to see. I know it's a lot. And you do them all well, so they're lovely to read! Not at all jarring.

On a personal note, I hate Kal, but I still really love serpent-form for these guys. And Kal's unfortunately got a nice one. All that soft gray. If he weren't bleeding all over the place and entirely likely to murder me, he'd almost be huggable.

Almost. XD

I like the 'Kal goes splat in the mud' panels the best. They're my favorites, because of course they are. XD

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27th Oct 2018, 9:26 PM

HeSerpenty

Hahaha yees I'm afraid we need Kal ALIIIVE X"D. for now >__>
Needless to say you are right he did not help any situations here. Dare I say...Kal has made things worse,I"m sure. HAY but that's what stories are for right? Things HAVE to get worse! Or it's not interesting? THat's what I'm goin' with X"D

Thank you so much! <3

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