Chapter 5.23-- Bitter Sweet

posted 12th Nov 2016, 9:53 AM

Chapter 5.23-- Bitter Sweet
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12th Nov 2016, 9:53 AM

HeSerpenty

The love and the memories
So sweet and so true,
But there's pain and there's suffering
When I look at you.


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So sorry the page is late you guys. A lot of road blocks this week.

Please enjoy this glimpse into some bittersweet and important memories revolving around this significant relationship. I hope the page illustrates the feeling and message I hoped to convey!

Have a great weekend everybodyyy!


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12th Nov 2016, 9:53 AM

HeSerpenty

Hey guys I just wanna drop a little shout out here. A dear friend of mine, AzureXTwilight has opened up emergency commissions to try to raise money for her grandpa's hospital bill. It's a STEAL she's only charging 5 dollars! You can find more information here!!

I treated myself already....

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Well worth five dollars, amiright? If you are interested or know someone who's interested you can Private message her on ComicFury! Thanks guys!


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12th Nov 2016, 9:56 AM

TheD-Wrek

God damn, Serp. That is one powerful page. Worth the wait. :'D

view HeSerpenty's profile

12th Nov 2016, 9:59 AM

HeSerpenty

Ee thank you so much, D! That really means a lot!

12th Nov 2016, 10:32 AM

Visvires

*sits on edge of chair and eats popcorn*

I love the use of lighting on this.

At least the delay means we only have to wait 6 days for the next one.

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12th Nov 2016, 11:02 PM

HeSerpenty

LOL I am glad there is at least one up side to a late page! X"DD

Thank you so much! (It's hard on me that these two picked sunset as their favorite time of day :'D-- it's a challenge! lolol)

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12th Nov 2016, 10:47 AM

Centcomm

... T_T ouch.. lovely page .. I salute you.

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12th Nov 2016, 11:03 PM

HeSerpenty

Thank you so much Centy!

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12th Nov 2016, 12:10 PM

Carvone

I really have nothing to say to this page other than that it's simultaneously sweet and heartbreaking.

The difference between the top and bottom halves of this page. Ouch.

Art wise, this is probably one of my favorite pages. The coloring is just so clever! All the top, happy bits have warm, reddish colors like Gwynn's design, and she's wearing all these pretty sunset-colored dresses. And then it switches midway through to a bright, somewhat harsh yellow when everything goes south. Neither of them is wearing any red in the wedding scene either, and I almost didn't recognize Gwynn without her usual reds, and Keymen looks that much more vulnerable without his usual thick clothing.

And the last panels... The ring is LITERALLY the only bright spot in the entire scene. I wonder what happened to it. If the Council did break up the wedding, then I imagine that it was the first thing they took away.

Again, ouch.

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12th Nov 2016, 12:13 PM

Carvone

Also, I'm sorry you and Azure are having a rough time! Best of luck to both of you.

Do you know if Azure's commissions need to be via PayPal? I'd like to help, but I don't have an account of that type.

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12th Nov 2016, 11:08 PM

HeSerpenty

Ahh yet again you just nail it completely <33-- you always seem to be on the same page of what I'm trying to get at :D :D

And it's so interesting you point out his much more casual style when he's younger..that it's "more vulnerable". So interesting you say that! And I am so glad! The way he dresses now is ABSOLUTELY more guarded than when he was younger--there is indeed a reason for this. I'm so excited to get into it :D :D.

Ohhhoho that scene with the wedding dress and the ring-- when everyone finds out what exactly the Council did.... they will want EVEN MORE to burn them with fire XD. Ican'twait :3

Thank you sooo much! As for the commissions.. I sent Azure a message asking her if there's another method of payment she can accept. I will let you know as soon as I know something!

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12th Nov 2016, 2:05 PM

Proxy170

You are really good at showing age progression! It's tough to do in this age range too.
I'm REALLY curious about the wedding panels...like...can we see that whole scene one day?? Or more of an explanation? D:
Man there is so much hurt for Keymen...I kinda understand why he's hesitant. Probably thinking that their reunion will only bring back pain. But I just know things will be better once the rough patch is over...go get her!!!

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12th Nov 2016, 11:11 PM

HeSerpenty

Proxy that is the most awesome thing to hear! I was worried that ages wouldn't come across the right way haha..cuz it is a challenging age to convey ESPECIALLY since they both aged pretty dang well X'D haha

And yes! I do promise that someday I will tell the whole story of that scene- I have to admit it is a pretty dang sad one. Keymen's pretty good at handling physical pain but when it comes to THIS... it seems to affect him quite a bit :'D. You are definitely right tho! He needs to get this over with!

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12th Nov 2016, 2:19 PM

Alicia

Perfect panel composition! All the panels... everything within each panel... it all works together SO WELL to show that flood of memories and emotions Keymen is going through just at seeing her. <3 I LOVE IT ALL SO MUCH!

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13th Nov 2016, 9:33 AM

HeSerpenty

Thank you so much! That makes me SO GLAD to hear! <33

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12th Nov 2016, 3:38 PM

MST3KFan

So many feels on this page. So much went on between these two, and you can tell from all this.

Excellent page, Serpy! XD

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13th Nov 2016, 9:35 AM

HeSerpenty

Thank you very much! YEsssss so very much did-- enough to make them still so deeply affected all these years later :'D

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12th Nov 2016, 5:01 PM

Matt Knab

Woah, that's a lot of emotions to hit him squarely in the face!

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13th Nov 2016, 9:35 AM

HeSerpenty

You got that right!

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12th Nov 2016, 5:28 PM

azureXtwilight

Goddamnit this page makes me cry.... I am 100 percent more sure Hizzy is his...

And thank you, Serpy! You are an angel <3

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13th Nov 2016, 9:36 AM

HeSerpenty

Egads you were already so sure before... and now even MORE sure! :O!!

Thank you so much tho! I kinda wanted to get to people here X"D

And you are welcome <33-- I hope some fruit comes of it!

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12th Nov 2016, 9:04 PM

DLKmusic

I can't even think of a phrase that describes how well done this was, Serpy.

"The Feels" is pretty danged understated.

I think your imagery would work better for this song than anything I've seen on youtube...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MUuNDb-nm5M

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13th Nov 2016, 9:39 AM

HeSerpenty

Oooh I love that song!! And o man...so accurate :')

Thank you soo much! This is a REALLY significant moment for Keymen...seeing her for the first time in almost 20 years. HE knew this very thing would happen..this flood of memories-- perhaps why he was so hesitant? :'D

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12th Nov 2016, 10:42 PM

junoro

My heart... oh Keymen and Gwynn.... oh man.....
the two memories where Gwynn is wearing the wedding dress and then Keymen's crying like that.... it gets me right in the heart ;___; Really, really good page

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13th Nov 2016, 9:46 AM

HeSerpenty

Thank you so much, Juno!
That particular scene those two memories illustrate..... someday when I get to tell the whole story we'll get to see just how tragic it really was :'D
Perhaps some explanation as to why he was such a pansy about this whole situation? XDD

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13th Nov 2016, 3:24 AM

CiciEnixa

Why do I have this nagging feeling that you and everyone else's comic I'm reading is conspiring to brokoro my kokoro slowly but surely? XD

Ahhh but other than that, my gosh, Serpy, how can you make such a beautiful and sad thing like this?! Like it goes from such an innocent, reddish mood of wuv that blossom into deeper reds, and then you just... THROW in the most painful two panels in history and now that red is just... so bloody and broken and excuse me, I'm gonna find some glue for my heart :,D

Random Thing Cici Noticed Today: Gwynn owns white lipstick and it is about as cold as the Council's nonexistent hearts.

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13th Nov 2016, 11:32 PM

HeSerpenty

LOL....brokoro your kokoro? Hahaha o man I proobably shouldn't be so amused by this concept X"D

Aw man Cici thank you so so much! This page was a lot of hard work to convey right colors and mindsets and i'm just so thrilled when it works <333
You are purely awesome!

LOL this is true with the white lipstick! Certainly this wasn't a happy occasion :'D

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13th Nov 2016, 10:45 AM

revzet

AFSDJJDDJDHA BABIES

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13th Nov 2016, 11:33 PM

HeSerpenty

THEY NEED HUGS!! (preferably by each other? X'DDDD)

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13th Nov 2016, 2:00 PM

Skweeee

Hey Heserpenty! I have to say that not only do I admire your ability to create dialog which works well, but your storytelling without words is outstanding on this page!!! So much information in this page of wordless exposition, executed so well!!

You are a gifted story teller!!

The love making panel, and the hand holding the ring in the box panels are my favorites on this page. Beautiful Page!!!!!

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14th Nov 2016, 1:08 AM

HeSerpenty

Aw man this comment very much made my day, Sqweee! <33

THank you SO much! It very much needed to be a wordless page for this moment--I am soooo happy you enjoy it and that it's understandable and is translating appropriately. I'm truly grateful for this wonderful feedback! :D

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13th Nov 2016, 2:47 PM

Slim Kittens

You need to take a DNA test, Hizruk.

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14th Nov 2016, 1:42 AM

HeSerpenty

LOL!!!! It might have some interesting results, who knows! XDD

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13th Nov 2016, 5:00 PM

rufiangel

This really is a beautiful page, Serpy!!! It says so much without a single word ;3;* So many lovely and also heartbreaking memories... T_T I didn't realise he'd gone to try and stop her on her wedding day, that is the saddest thing ;_____; Keymen crying is a brokoro moment for sure ahhh :'D

And THAT RING ;A; ;A; ;A;!!!

I'm really looking forward to the next page Serps!!!

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14th Nov 2016, 12:27 PM

HeSerpenty

Thank you soo much, Rufiii!! <3333
Oh yes that last time they say each other that those last two memories illustrate were sooo painful for both of them that is for sure! We haven't really seen that tearful, broken side to him :'D--quite a contrast to who he is now!

THANK YOU AGAIN!! <3

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13th Nov 2016, 7:24 PM

Seabiscuit

Aw gosh no, this page... MY HEART. THE FEELS.
Hella impressive, this is so perfectly done, omg.;~;

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14th Nov 2016, 12:30 PM

HeSerpenty

Thank you so much, Sea!! <333
This was a very important moment :'D

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13th Nov 2016, 9:28 PM

Outlaw

Oh... man... that was freakin' aweosome.
I know I'm not the first to mention it, but jeez, this page is marvelous. You say so much without saying anything at all and you can literally feel what the characters are feeling.

That's the mark of a real artist, IMO. Keep it up, my friend.

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15th Nov 2016, 12:20 AM

HeSerpenty

Ah man, thank you soooo much! I am so glad that the feelings are being felt because they are SOO important for this moment! This feedback is precious to me <33 :')

14th Nov 2016, 9:51 AM

Lilbluebox

Aw, his hair used to be so floofy~ That first panel! So CUTE!

And now, onto your regularly scheduled word vomit.

You know, flashback scenes aren't easy to pull off. Maybe that's just from a prose perspective, or maybe it's just me, but flashback scenes are really, really tricky to nail. It's too easy to make them hokey or out of place, and it's waaaay too easy to make them clunky. This page is none of those things. Not only does it fit and flow, but it fits PERFECTLY. This is exactly the kind of reaction I would expect out of Keymen after seeing her for the first time in years. The lack of words are, I think, what really pulls the page together and makes it work. Words would just clutter things up, get in the way... But here, you've done away with words entirely. You've SHOWN us what he's feeling instead of trying to dialogue it, and it works exceptionally well.

Bittersweet indeed.

Another reason this flashback works so well is because you've nailed the age progression. I see two kids ages 16 -18 growing up on this page. It's fascinating; very well done indeed. There's even a marked contrast between 18-year-old Keymen and present day Keymen. I'm very much impressed.

Having present-day Gwynn as the centerpiece for this page is probably the best part about it. That's what pulls the entire page together. The composition is lovely. All in all, it's just this beautiful, heartwrenching page. A real gutpunch to the emotions. So, y'know, good job!

You know, I've been wanting to roast the Council alive over a fire for at least five chapters now. I cannot WAIT to hear the explanation behind this travesty. >.>

...On that note, I do have theories, because of course I do, but... I think I'll keep them under my hat for now. At least in the comment section. :D

I think I had more to say but I can't remember anymore. Oh well. It'll hit me later, I'm sure.

Well done.

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15th Nov 2016, 12:25 AM

HeSerpenty

Psh I LIVE for this scheduled word vomit! <333 lolol

You are absolutely right..flashback scenes ARE really hard haha. You have no idea how much I stressed out about this page before I actually did it... but at the same time I couldn't wait to share this information. I'm SO HAPPY it worked! This really is one of those times when showing NEEDS to happen over telling.. it just wouldn't have been effective any other way :'D.

O man there IS quite a contrast between younger Keymen and current Keymen-so happy this shows. Some elements are the same, but....overall very different.

Haha and I don't believe you are alone in your desire to watch the Council burn.. both from other readers aaand the characters themselves. Especially the characters on this page even XDD. You know I'm always eager to hear theories! I do hope I will get to hear them :3

Again, thank you so much!!

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14th Nov 2016, 11:20 AM

MistakeNPotatoes

What if... he was HIZRUK'S DAD!?

Bum bum bummmm

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15th Nov 2016, 12:27 AM

HeSerpenty

LOL!!!
Well..... many share in this theory. Hell I think ANYone would rather admit Keymen instead of Merlock as their father. That would work out well for a few characters! Haha

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16th Nov 2016, 6:23 AM

alston123

Omg. It's too much! Much too much!!!!!!!!! I knew it! I knew it! I don't know if this means that Hizruk is his son, but it's clear that they were in love. Why didn't they work out? I want to understand. I know there is a reason why she married that douchebag, Merlock. Man, this is sooooooooooo much juice. :3 :D:D:D

And a beautiful page might I add. ^_^

16th Nov 2016, 5:19 PM

Visvires

The simplest explanation is that he ran off when she was pregnant, and she needed to pass the kid off as someone else's. What kind of guy do you get when you've got that kind of deadline?

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16th Nov 2016, 9:53 PM

HeSerpenty

Lol! Wow I have never heard that particular theory before--- but it's great! That would make Keymen a total complete shmuck if you ask me LOL

18th Nov 2016, 9:30 AM

Visvires

I didn't say he knew. If conception was the night before he found out he had to run for his life, that particular blame would fall on chance, not him.

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18th Nov 2016, 10:24 AM

HeSerpenty

Ah yes, that is true. I will say a lot of chance did seem to happen regarding these two and this particular event!

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16th Nov 2016, 9:51 PM

HeSerpenty

Lolol! Yusss absolutely they were very much in love! Aw man well the answer to why is illustrated briefly in the wedding dress panels, buuut.. I promise you I will TELL the story someday too <33

Thank you so much, Alston!!! <333

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18th Nov 2016, 5:25 AM

LeRenardRoux

*SOB*

*sniff*

*blows nose loudly*

You did a really good job of making them look younger there! It's so subtle but it's perfect. *single tear*

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18th Nov 2016, 10:24 AM

HeSerpenty

Lol! Thank you so much Roux! <33
O dear I didn't mean to laugh at your tears.. *gives you chocolate* <33

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2nd Dec 2016, 2:46 PM

gideonland

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5th Dec 2016, 5:18 PM

HeSerpenty

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5th Dec 2016, 4:21 PM

Chris the Blue

Triggered his love gun!

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5th Dec 2016, 5:18 PM

HeSerpenty

Hahha sure did! His one true weakness!

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23rd Jan 2017, 4:41 PM

ProfEtheric

Oh my freaking GOD, the feels...

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24th Jan 2017, 12:47 AM

HeSerpenty

Yusss that is the reaction I had hoped for! <333

But yea.. looots of pain between these two x"DD

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13th Jun 2017, 10:39 AM

merlinnia

Awwwwwwwww... I'm finally catching up on this Serpy!!! Omg Gwynn and Keymen <3

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13th Jun 2017, 11:19 AM

HeSerpenty

Aww YAY!!! I MISS YOU! <333
Haha maybe we'll finally get somewhere between these two! XD

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