Chapter 5.22-- Make a Deal

posted 4th Nov 2016, 11:30 AM

Chapter 5.22-- Make a Deal
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4th Nov 2016, 11:30 AM



Guys... I can't wait for next page.

How are all of you? Good, I hope! Please enjoy the update! And thank you for reading!

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4th Nov 2016, 11:46 AM


AHH I can't wait for the next page too!!

And somehow, you've made me torn between wanting to learn more about this plant and his use for it and their reunion XD Good writing, girl!

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4th Nov 2016, 1:21 PM


THank you so much Proxyyyy!!!

I always have fun WRITING these scenes-- I'm so happy to hear when people enjoy reading them! <333

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4th Nov 2016, 11:50 AM



The suspense!

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4th Nov 2016, 2:14 PM


Lolol!!! I am deeply sorry! THERES NO TURNING we gotta wait! Hehe

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4th Nov 2016, 11:54 AM


Yaaaaassss XD

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4th Nov 2016, 3:35 PM


Time for some feels!! XDD

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4th Nov 2016, 12:04 PM


Oooh! Right when he was about to make the deal, along comes the one person he probably wished to avoid for just a bit longer. XD

Something tells me he's either gonna have to face the music, or hide behind the counter. XP

view HeSerpenty's profile

4th Nov 2016, 9:04 PM


LOL it's funny you should say that! XDD

Yes whaaat are the chances they'd wind up RIGHT across the street from one another-- imagine that! XD

5th Nov 2016, 11:41 AM


Hiding behind the counter will not save him. Octavia would turn him in. She'll have seen that reaction, and need only say hi to initiate the drama. Drama, favor for a pillar of the community, and see a rival squirm? Yeah. There is no hiding place, there.

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5th Nov 2016, 1:36 PM


Lolol I wouldn't put it past Octavia to love watching him squirm-- nothing like watching someone with so much confidence suddenly LOSE it all in an instance X"D.

Buuuut then again this guy was about to offer her a REALLY sweet deal. Maybe..JUST MAYBE...she won't wanna mess that up? Hahahaha the next couple of weeks will tell!

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4th Nov 2016, 12:26 PM

Matt Knab

Deal-making combo broken!

But...I could totally listen to the two of them explain things to each other that they already know all day. XD

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4th Nov 2016, 10:42 PM


Hahaha I am glad that you enjoy the banter!It is fun to write XDD

But indeed this is quite the interruption!

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4th Nov 2016, 1:34 PM


Oooh! OMG! The suspense! (Next page he immediately trips over his own feet and falls on his face in a mud puddle for the perfect first (kinda) re-impression.)

I love the banter! It' so strange, I don't know exactly why, but even before reading your author's comment on the previos page I could tell that Octavia had to be Centcomm's. :D

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4th Nov 2016, 10:44 PM


LOL how did you guess what was going to happen next??? D:
Hahaha indeed.... Keymen is Mr. Cooool riiight up until it comes to Gwynn and then he just LOSES it X"D

That's pretty awesome you sensed Centy's handywork like that! I guess she is pretty much the queen of sassy but beautiful women LOL. It must mean I am doing Octavia right! :3

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5th Nov 2016, 6:33 PM


hahaha ! ok thats funny .. whats amusing is ROSE is the sassy one. not me! But.. yes guilty.. Octavia is a sassy gal. And Serpenty totally nailed her personality. However she does have a good nature.. shes even happyer with a profit besides!

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6th Nov 2016, 12:24 AM


Hehe I am so happy you are satisfied with how she's coming out Centy! She is a joy to write <333

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4th Nov 2016, 10:54 PM


Hahaha I'd say that's putting it mildly! XD

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4th Nov 2016, 3:05 PM


Octavia continues to be a gem! I love all of her expressions, especially the ver-very-suspicious-of-notorious-doctors-offering-deals one and the instant-puppy-eyes one. Also, does her "twice-yearly trip" involve leaving the Serpent nation?? If it doesn't grow inside the nation, then her only other option is buying from a (human) supplier, which sounds almost as dangerous!

The last panels. Wow.

I love the (intentional) contrast to their designs. Dark hair and blond hair, and they're wearing red and a muted blue. And the structure where the alternate panels.

The last panel is just haunting.

It's so, so different from clever, conniving Keymen cutting a deal with Octavia just a second ago. If that's a reaction to just seeing her, I wonder/worry how their conversation will go.

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5th Nov 2016, 12:27 AM


Yes as a matter of a fact, she does have to leave the Serpent Nation in order to retrieve this plant! Alas, that is part of why she was so snippy at the idea of Keymen using it for patients hahaha. Indeed it iS a dangerous undertaking for a serpent to ever leave that is for sure. And again I am so thrilled that you enjoy Octavia!

And thank you sooo much! I wanted thos panels to be a stark contrast from the rest of the page....and also from each other. I'm so glad it comes across that way! Yea this is a whooole different countenance than what he's had before X"DD

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5th Nov 2016, 3:35 PM


Huh, and the council doesn't have something to say about it? Although I could definitely imagine Octavia sneaking out on the sly whatever they say!

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4th Nov 2016, 4:58 PM


Auesome page again, Serpy! I like how Keyman turned that one around... however, there are only three words to describe how you ended the page with this particular cliffhanger...


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5th Nov 2016, 12:33 AM


Lolol! This is the first time he's seen her in over 18 years!!! Gonna be QUITE the moment I must say hahaa

Thank you so much!

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4th Nov 2016, 5:41 PM


Keymen you are goooooood~

... Also you are deeeeeeaaaaaadddddd XDDD

(sowwy i'm just catching up now XD I really like this lady, she's cool and knows a good business deal when she hears one :D)

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5th Nov 2016, 12:34 AM


LOL! He's good and dead! That's a perfect way to put it!

And thank you Cici!!! She is oodles of fun <33... and definitely knows a good deal when she hears one!

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4th Nov 2016, 6:57 PM



And Keymen lost his mind

"You know what? I gotta hightail outta here, pronto. Forget I exist. Bai."

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5th Nov 2016, 12:36 AM


LOL we are getting theeere!!! SO CLOSE!

Haha yea..he thought he was so cool until those last four panels came along!

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4th Nov 2016, 7:11 PM

Slim Kittens

I was going to comment about the blue-eyed devil's "you gotta be kidding me" look in panel 3, but the last four panels made me forget all about it.

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5th Nov 2016, 12:37 AM


LOL! For anyone who might've been bored about the discussion of the medicine.....I hoped those last 4 panels would make the page all worthwhile!
Hahahaha :D :D

4th Nov 2016, 9:05 PM


Hello again!
I don't comment much on most comic websites (except for a select few, where I comment a LOT xD), but I HAVE actually been following your comic for the past few months :)
1) Keymen's face in the third panel is hilarious xD
2) I am very very impressed by all the hair-shine, especially Keymen's. Wow. That's some skill right there *-*
3)...I don't know if I can handle next week's page x'D (that's a good thing though-- it means you have good storytelling :) )
(augh the angst >.<)

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5th Nov 2016, 12:41 AM


Hello again, Kat! :D

I am sooo happy that you have been following Serpents! And I LOVE your comments, so thank you so much! I truly hope that you are enjoying and will continue to enjoy the story! I shall answer your comment in the form you commented :3:

1) LOL he's like "...seriously?" XDD haha
2) Thank you so much! Shading and highlighting the hair is the looongest part of the shading process-- four different shades other than the base color if you can believe it! :'D
3)Next week's page is....... gonna have some feels, spoiler alert XD. Thank you sooo much, I really appreciate it! <3

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4th Nov 2016, 11:02 PM


Drama incoming in 3...2...1.... Are you prepared enough Keymen? :)

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6th Nov 2016, 12:25 AM


Hhahaha I don't think he IS ready for it! XDDDD

4th Nov 2016, 11:04 PM


Well. I'm sure this will go swimmingly.

I, for one, would love to know what happens to someone who takes magnus deleox who doesn't need it. Does it eat them up from the insides, for lack of anything else to chew on? Make your blood boil? Give you a nasty rash? Inquisitive readers want to know!

Octavia and Keymen interacting just entertains me so very, very much. Here are these two clever, cunning individuals, one of whom is a shrewd businesswoman, the other of whom understands that fact and is more than willing to work with it. The banter between them is great, and the rapport just makes me happy. I foresee a great business arrangement in their future. And snark. So. Much. Snark. Keymen's never gonna get his medicines from her without a liberal dose of snark and it's BEAUTIFUL.

Sparkle-panel with Octavia when he brings up this lucrative business deal. SEE?

On the other hand, Keymen's face in his little circle panel at the top of the page is the epitome of 'you're kidding, right?' So that makes me happy.

I spy a wild Gwynn in that biiiig middle panel. Yesssss~ Totally called it. >:]

...Not that it was that hard to predict, but... yeah. Anyways.

The entire last line of panels on this page is... well, for one, it's a total mood changer, both for the characters and for the readers. As readers, we've just been sitting here, enjoying glorious snarky banter, and then BOOM. Imminent reunion. We can almost taste it and we're going nuts over here. Almost painful, so well done. As for the characters...

Well, just look at Keymen's face! In all three of his panels he's absolutely terrified. Shocked, scared - the boy can handle his way around pretty much anything but his emotional state, but in this case, I really can't blame him for it. Gwynn's it. The one massive chink in his cunning armor, the one thing that, right now, he has NO idea how to deal with. And it's the first time he has seen her in nearly two decades... I'd be in full blown panic mode too.

And she's looking as lovely as ever - AND wearing the necklace. That can't be helping the poor guy any.

So artwise... last line of panels is my absolute favorite on the entire page, just because of how well you've played it out. I particularly love that first one in the corner, with the smaller one of Keymen's eye right next to Gwynn. It's just an excellent layout and it's super effective. As is slowly going on in his face, watching him turn... oh yes, well done indeed.

And poor, oblivious Gwynn has yet to look up and see him.

This, ladies and gentlemen, are how cliffhangers are made.

Except not really because we all know the reunion's happening one way or another the next page. It's just how it's all going to go down that has us interested. Or me interested, anyway. It's sad how many different ways I've tried to imagine this going; mostly I just flail around in disgust at how bad all my imaginings are and bleh. Absolutely cannot wait to see it happen for real.

(And then I can reference it in fic, I mean what?)

So very well done, Serpy. Looking forward to next week.

5th Nov 2016, 11:37 AM


The title "poison of poison" suggests an ability to react with a wide range of unwanted compounds, rendering them inert. The lingering effects of the poison suggest that it's something that the liver cannot process and that the kidneys can't remove. As long as it's stuck around, it must have some mechanism for preferentially avoiding being filtered out, otherwise progressive dilution would've accidentally purged (much of) it by now. (I don't know how much the snakes vary from this, but a human body has ~5 liters of blood, and runs through (hopefully) a couple liters of water a day. A concentration can only be cut down by 40% so many times before the molecule count hits zero.)

So if you take the reagent without something you want it to react with, then it doesn't react to something you want it to react to. But it's still there. It's broad enough to hit "poisons" rather than a specific one? It probably finds something to react with, anyway. Some unfortunate hormone, perhaps, one that you could stand losing some of as collateral damage for a miracle cure, but might not want to part with in the name of an expensive salad. I'd expect unwarranted use to screw with some aspect of blood chemistry, and apparently not in a pleasant way (Keymen said no "feel good" qualities).

Also, he's about to stumble into a conversation he's been thinking about for years. One he was anxious enough about to avoid her entirely. One that he doesn't have *a* plan for, but rather multiple competing options that he can now trip over. Also, he isn't even going to get credit for turning himself in. Nope. He was still trying to play dead, she just caught him.

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6th Nov 2016, 2:50 AM


I absolutely LOVE your insights here! It's pretty spot on to be honest! Especially in bringing up the liver and the kidneys, and all the other biological things you mentioned :3
Thank you so much for this-- it's so completely awesome for me to read I LOVE it when you guys are practically peeking in to my brain and putting things together! Coolest thing ever <3

Haha and yea.... heeeee kind of dropped the ball on this whole situation, didn't he? That's a good lesson... if you have something to deal with ya should just do it before you trip over it by accident!

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6th Nov 2016, 2:45 AM


Haha I have been thinking about maybe coming up with a little info reference for Magnus Deleox that gives more detail since it's not necessarily spoilery to the story and maybe it will be interesting for people to read! You have inspired me yet again <3

Haha I really do think that despite their cunning personalities, Keymen and Octavia really WOULD make an awesome business partnership. He has plenty of other things to think about other than just making people feel better... he would probably LIKE to send people over to her haha

I'm so happy that the last line of panels is coming across the right way! Weeee...haven't really seen Keymen quite like this yet--- completely at a loss. I wanted to put it with this snarky, cunning business interaction to show that stark contrast. How he can go ffrom having the situation in his hand to dropping it completely lolol. As the next page should show...... seeing her for the firs time in nearly 2 decades is a VERY big deal for him :3.
You nailed it tho! She is the huge chink in that armor of his for SURE! As of right now he's only seen her...she hasn't seen him! Will he be man enough to be seen? Only time will tell! Lolol. But you are right... one way or another this reunion IS happening! I feel like I can FINALLY DRAW shippy pics of them again after that happens hahaha... I have been fasting from shippy pics of them in waiting for the moment that is getting ever closer :D

Thankyou so much, my friend! You make me so very excited to finish each page with your wonderful insights! :D

view Centcomm's profile

5th Nov 2016, 1:26 PM


OH yes... He JUST got Octavia's FULL attention! Brilliant ... Claps! thank you for another great page!

view HeSerpenty's profile

6th Nov 2016, 2:50 AM


LOL bring up a sweet deal like that a smart lady like her will start listening!

Haha thank YOU Centy! For always reading <333

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5th Nov 2016, 4:43 PM


Hahaha, those little sparkles made me giggle. BUT, AH! BEHIND! OH GOSH I'M SO GLAD HE LOOKED BEHIND HIMSELF!
Omg omg GO SAY HI!

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6th Nov 2016, 2:52 AM


Hahahaha he heard dat smooth voice he remembers so diligently and suddenly everything else disappeared!
LOL! O dear I think that's a little easier said than done! Hehe (saying hi i mean haha) <3333

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5th Nov 2016, 9:37 PM


GASP could it beeeeeee????!!!!⸍⚙̥ꇴ⚙̥⸌ FINALLY!!!!!! (*≧∀≦*) edge of my seat till next week..AAAGH!!!!

(also, that the third little round perfect.(༎ຶꈊ༎ຶ╬)ha!

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6th Nov 2016, 10:03 AM


Lolol THANK U PONYYYY!!! I am super excited for next page! maybe too much so! I need to take a chill pill..


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5th Nov 2016, 10:34 PM


At first I was like, "Aww yeah, Keymen laying on the charm and getting what he wants!" but then Gwynn walked in and I was like "OOOOOOOH DANG HIS CHARM CAN'T SAVE HIM NOW"

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6th Nov 2016, 4:05 AM


AAAAAAA, gimme the next page!

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6th Nov 2016, 10:03 AM


Lolol!! I will, Auntyyy I promise you!

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6th Nov 2016, 10:14 PM


Awesome page, my friend. I can't wait to see what happens next.

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7th Nov 2016, 9:41 PM


Thank you so much!! I am excited too :D

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7th Nov 2016, 12:48 PM

Chris the Blue

Get a man who looks at you like Keyman panickly glances at Gwen.

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7th Nov 2016, 9:41 PM


LOL!! Amen to that <333

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7th Nov 2016, 9:41 PM


Hahahaha the closest they've been to each other in almost 20 years! X"DD

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8th Nov 2016, 6:12 AM

Mel Cormac

Damn his face went from snark fest to "ohcrap" in NO time!

view HeSerpenty's profile

9th Nov 2016, 6:49 PM


Hahaha you got that right! Maybe... i mean she hasn't seen him yet x"D

YES it sure did! She can sure get to him...whether she knows it or not!!

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11th Nov 2016, 7:17 PM


..and then came Gywnn....

You're going to kill me here, Serp~

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12th Nov 2016, 10:58 AM


LOL! I am happy that you are happy! XDDD

You crackin' me up XD THank you!

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